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AGE: 59
LOC: White Lake, WI
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: June 07

I live in the shadow of the Menominee forest and associate with the good people who nurture its magnificent trees. Yes, I’m a woodpecker, but I don’t dwell on that.
I write novels mainly. The short fiction pieces I flash are generally clips from larger works with the edges smoothed a bit. It’s flashing without the negative consequences, don’t you know?
I’m looking for an agent. Are you one?
Be critical in your reviews if that’s what you think. I’m past suffering ego damage.

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Short Story / Miracle at Science Plaza
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1 Review   2 Comments
Miracle at Science Plaza Campus visitors marvel at the bouquets arranged in the chain link fence surrounding the statue of Isaac Newton in Science Plaza. Some are surprised by the fence itself. Who puts a statue of the father of physics in a cage like a cockatiel? The fence has been in place for five years and it seems more ordinary with each year, yet the questions continue and the flowers reappear the week of the Spring Equinox. “For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction!” Ed...
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Short Story / Miracle at Science Plaza
Version 1
2 Reviews   7 Comments
Campus visitors in the early spring marvel at the flower bouquets arranged in the chain link fence surrounding the statue of Isaac Newton in Science Plaza. Some are surprised by the fence itself. What college cages the father of physics and celestial mechanics like a cockatiel? The fence has been in place for five years, and it seems more ordinary with each year. Yet, the questions continue and the flowers reappear the week of the Spring Equinox. “Every body perseveres in its state of rest, o...
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Short Story / Mother's Blinkies
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3 Reviews   1 Comment
With one eye in the natural world and one in the supernatural, Mother was quick to notice when something was going wrong. “There’s no word for what I have because normal people don’t have them,” she told me. “I call them blinkies. They come quick as a blink and faint as angel breath -- blinkies.” She wondered why I didn’t have blinkies too, since I was her son and was home schooled, and especially since I had her brown eyes. I tried, and she tried to teach me, but I was blinkie-blind. I never...
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7 Reviews   16 Comments
Telli Trujillo bent over to look closely at the top of the display case. “Who leaves these goddamned fingerprints everywhere?” he said, his words ringing hollow in the empty room. He moved the tip of his fat index finger over the surface, scowling at the cloudy smudge it left as it smeared the marks underneath. He drew his lips into a tight pucker and looked out the front window. “Customers are dogs pissing on fire hydrants.” Eighteen months at MoPhones and Telli had lost all enthusiasm for h...
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Short Story / White Shirts
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4 Reviews   3 Comments
When I was six years old, I rode with my mother on the bus to the grocery every Wednesday after school. In those days all the businessmen riding the bus wore white shirts. Most of the time they wore suit coats over the white shirts, but during the hottest parts of summer they carried their coats over their arms. It was the uniform, the fashion set by IBM I suppose. I noticed the white shirts many times and one day every man on the bus had one on. “Why do all the men wear white shirts?” I aske...
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Poetry / Perfection
I like the historical references. I like the fact that you focus down on one theme (pretty much) and take it through the poem to the end. The first time I read it I didn't like the meter. The couplettes seems wrong for the content. The second time through (I was focusing on meter to try to figure out why it troubled me) I liked it better. You have some very fine imagery -- I like virtues tied in perfect curls the best.
Short Story / Alone
The underlying plot is fine--I don't miss the explanation or her disappearance. There are spelling and grammar errors that I find distracting. I also found distracting your technique of using separate lines for a quote and the attribution: “You too.” He said as he made his way to the exit door’s Some of the dialog and some of the action seems like filler to me. Perhaps you could trim this down to flash fiction size (1,000 words or so) while retaining the basic story. Can you think of another ...
Short Story / John Doe
This is a delightful, if somewhat macabre, little story. Very creative. I don't think I've read anything quite like it. I miss having the plot reach some sort of climax, though--it trails along and then ends. Perhaps that's what you intend (an ironic mirroring of your character's fate) but it left me a bit unsatisfied. Overall very good writing. I enjoyed you quirky humor especially.
Short Story / An Untold Secret
This is a very powerful, difficult situation to write about. Paternal abuse of girls reeks with heart-rending, psychological drama. This is very difficult stuff to write about. A couple of ideas--perhaps Melody could have a friend (even an imagined one--a stuffed toy or something) to confide in. This helps you avoid having her talk to herself but lets you bring in the most intimate thoughts. A diary might serve the same purpose. Second, I think most girls put into this situation go through co...
This moves along nicely, if a bit predictably. The boy-twin is unlikable enough and the girl likeable enough. The plot (fast Indian food and custom weaving; self-centered boy fails; uncomplaining girl succeeds) is reasonable and interesting. The parents seem believable to me (perhaps because I know little about this culture). All well done and well written--until the end. The end is precipitous. Yes, it resolves the moral tension you've created, but it all happens too fast. The girl is made w...
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