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AGE: 29
LOC: United States
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: October 28

Attempting to clear out the general mind pollution of kindred spirits while simultaneously annoying the shit outta everyone else.

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Version 2
8 Reviews   15 Comments
*Swallowed madness*. *Puked*. *Painted with it*.
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Version 2
38 Reviews   44 Comments
Back at the bar, we sat underneath the softness of the down lighters. A handwritten sign above that read ACTORS DRINK-4-FREE hung at a slant like an infected tooth eagerly awaiting the crude twist of a back door dentist. I handed her the poem. Nadine snatched the wrinkled notebook page and set it on the counter. ”Do you want a drink?” I asked, reaching into an ice-filled metal bin. ”I need one.” Her voice sounded far off and distant as she read the poem aloud: Uneven and Upward the cycle spi...
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Version 1
40 Reviews   35 Comments
Lucky’s Pub served to a mixed crowd of people. Some were artists or poets who understood that liquor and shitty decor could sometimes ease out the ideas that hid from them during the daily distractions of city life, or just life in general. Others were young professionals who met after work to discuss important business. A few rounds of melon balls or vodka martinis usually led them to an early night of casual sex but rarely anything more fulfilling. Famous celebrities sometimes stopped in. ...
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With respect . . . Per reviewer's notes: _Firstly_, please don't apologize--"I wrote this in a rush. It is horribly put together and It is something I really wish to develop. This is the first draft. I hope to add more “acts” to it, as soon as I can figure them out."--for the way the story came out. _It colors an otherwise objective reviewer's mind that this is going to be a busted-out tale_. _Secondly_, the formatting is right on. You took the time, and congrats. I only get "credited" for a ...
Informational and fun to read too. Excellent. The first few sentences sidetracked my thinking instead of pulling me attention into the story. My thoughts after S1: "Really? Do they have to be? I have a really good Alton Brown recipe for those that I've been itching to try." and then after S2: "I'm pretty sure they do."--as I turn my eyes from the story to recollect my last visit to the grocery/convenience store. Distracting. So . . . For a first sentence I'd suggest, "_When_ you're heading fo...
S- Loves me some drabble kink. Perhaps give the minister a name? "The Minister" / "Minster Tie/Roper/Knotter/or that of any Republican politician well known for their outspoken views on "deviant" lifestyles i.e. Craig. an idea; mixers! / idea: mixers! "...rope in new members."--sweet enough to make my teeth hurt. Kudos. Consider: "Submitting to this divine inspiration, he..."--saves two words. And "...proud of the bold..."--loses the repetiton of dominating. You've already got _rope in_ and _...
100.0% Review Quality (4 Votes)
Give us action first--"Prodding her lashes back into place with an HB pencil, the assistant at the Clinique counter took two steps..." A suggestion, "...Sellotape. She had to be careful."--vary those sentence lengths. "She had..." the short sentence creates a theme and suspense. "peeled orange and unskinned banana"--fruitastically funny. Good enough to bruise peach-flavored cynicism. Suggestion, "I’ll take the basic hooker/tramp/trollop red, please." “Damn it love, / "Damn it, love. I have......
Flash Fiction / Samaritan (version 3)
H- Amazing drabble for my perfectly soaked and unexpectedly drenched day. Allows us to fill in the beginning and the ending. It's a middle man of sorts and gives the reader a canvas for which to paint their own experiences/interprative meanings. Like it. The story itself is brimming with sexuality. Perhaps find a way to delete a word and insert, "My _pink_ (or _red_) scarf!" as those words will color the reader's mind. Lines 2, 3, 4, 5 and 6 are what make the story really move--captures the w...
100.0% Review Quality (4 Votes)