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AGE: 22
LOC: Endicott, NY
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: July 31

Hello all. I’m a 21 year old woman from New york. I love to write and am looking foward to working with you all.

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Short Story / Crossroad
Version 2
4 Reviews   0 Comments
It all started the day I met him. Craig. There was no way to describe him. I suppose the usual description, Five foot eleven inches, with dark hair and beautiful chestnut eyes. Good eyes what are called bedroom eyes. I loved the way I was reflected in those eyes. But none of that seemed to do him justice. He had something else. A certain Je n’se qua that caught my attention instantly. It was my first day at a new school and I was feeling all the usual butterflies and sickness. I went th...
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2 Reviews   2 Comments
Once upon a time, there was a young girl. When she was small she would sit at her window, Brushing her golden hair, imagining; Pictureing the day when he would come, Her knight in shining armor. He'd cut through her chains and Wisk her away to a far off place. Her room was a her prison Her mom, the wicked witch. Her chores her chains Time passed, along with the fairy tales. She grew close to and cherished her friends Hours of hide and seek, and campfire stories, Of trips, and school yard game...
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Version 3
10 Reviews   7 Comments
Once upon a time, there was a young girl. When she was small she would dream, Of her knight in shining armor. She would sit at her window, brushing her golden hair, imagining; pictureing the day when he would come, and wisk her away to a far off place. Her room was a her prison Her mom, the wicked witch. Time passed, along with the fairy tales. She grew close to and cherished her friends Hours of hide and seek, and campfire stories, Of trips, and school yard games. Then One day she met a boy....
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3 Reviews   4 Comments
Me and him ended, Said our good-byes. Moved on with our lives, Severed all ties. And so here I am, Here with you. I've turned the page, Started over anew And I love you More then I loved him. you take me places I've never been before Make me walk out on a limb But he hurt me He hurt me real bad And even now, when I think about it It makes me so sad I can't do what I did And forget how to laugh Drowned my sorrows with beer, Give up all that I have That's why I am the way that I am I don't put ...
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Poetry / Insane.
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4 Reviews   3 Comments
I don't understand you; The things that you say. They drive me crazy Each and every day. Last night you scared me The things that you said Hurt me eeply Made me want to be dead "I thought I said to get the fuck out of here" It made my heart skip a beat Made a tear come to my eye And my worst fear I meet. You say that you were joking Are you lying to me? Buy why would you lie? I just don't see. I'm so crazy, totally insane I don't know what to do. I love you mroe then life itself But do you lo...
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Sci Fi & Fantasy / Spider's Kiss, Chapter 1
Wow. This was quite creative. But you should expand on the farret a little. Is it Jake? You completely leave it out of the rest of the story... did she bring it with her? Did she let it go? And wouldn't the vampire be after her once the sun set? What about making camp an escape? Is she worrieng about gettin Jake changed back? If it's Jake why isn't she talkin to him? Just Needs some expandsion
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Catherine Kennedy
The first paragraph is very repetive. I would scrap it and rewrite. "Cathrine wasn't like other women, or even human for that mater" little rough. Might read smoother like this "Cathrine wasn't like other woman. Actually she wasn't like any of the humans" "Vampires (had) been public..." You have cathrine meeting alexander and giving him a room then you have him in a room at the castle? A little confusing This has the makings of a really good story but it needs some work. Just clean up and suc...
Sci Fi & Fantasy / Kellers Prologue
Wow. This was really good. This gives a good lead into what seems like will be a better story. I am really impressed with the piece, of how it explains everything but doesn't go into long descriptions like some pieces like this seem to do. WELL DONE :)
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Action Adventure / Pandora's Succession
wow! action packed definatly hooked me
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