CindiLoftus's profile

Failed life, gained success, started therapy. I like it. I think you have to qualify your success though. So I think you can clarify that. You can't really fail life and gain success. So work with your same concept and try diff words until you get it perfect- examples failed marriage failed family monetary success career success, job success continues therapy Very good concept. Worth working on.

Too many contridictions. How can there be a cloud muted sunlight, a rainstreaked window and snowflakes blowing... all at the same time? Dump this one and start over. I don't think it's good enough to continue working on. You have other stuff that is much more worthy of your time.

Writing this kind of thing just for fun is great. But I am sure you realize this effort would take a lot of work to be made publication worthy. Believe it or not, I don't like you using the word masturbate(ing) because I think to portray the feelings involved you would be using other descriptives. Masturbate is too cold and clinical. It's funny that I am giving you tips on how to say it better- blow a wad, bust one out, stroking the sausage etc.. There is actually a thesauras of sex terms tha...

Alles ist Liebe German title . I translated it on google and came up with Everything is Love. If I hadn't used a translater, my guess at it would be All is Love. Nice title. What you have written as your 6 words is not proper English and not easily understood. It sounds like what you wrote was written in German and you used a translator to come up with the english version. It's a good idea, but not clear enough in meaning to be in an English language non-fiction book. "I’d just love or no con...