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Ceridwen's profile
AGE:
21
LOC: Freeport, IL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 18
LOC: Freeport, IL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: November 18
I am a pretty normal teenager, and at the moment I don’t have a whole lot of recent material, simply because I am in a lighter area overall in my mind. And as many writers can tell you, at least poetry-wise, it is difficult to create when you are happy. So if you are reading some of my stuff, don’t feel bad, it is from a while back and I have moved on since then.
I came here because a friend reccommended it and she and I both enjoy writing, so I hope this turns out to be everything I want from a writing site. Anything else you want to know about me, you can feel free to ask. Just know that I reserve the right to not answer, :D.
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It seems like forever since I last saw you And “forever” is what you said it’d be Forever together, the two of us You and me. We’d be the best of friends The ones we’d never had We’d be there for each other Through the happy, the mad and the sad You said this bond, it made us inseperable Over space and time And no matter what else happened We’d be together, somewhere, down the line But a line is just what it was A false promise, you made me feel true ...
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Floundering beneath the ice in summer
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How interesting is the extent of metamorphisis that comes about after death Not mine, obviously. No. How drastic is the aboutface occurring in my center, now off-balance. Is it mendable? Perhaps. How foreign is the helplessness now felt. Previously only intellectually known. You can't understand. Not before. How humbling is the knowledge of finity. Destroyed illusions of infallibility. Hit the wall. Laughing. How intriguing is this desperate loneliness. Crushed to my heart maniacally. Your he...
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Bittersweet symphony Or discordant cacophony All swims around me Like mermaids of the sea Elusive, fleeting, Beautiful and dark Evil, though it beckons A siren's song Fooling the blinded wise man Keeping up the status quo Phantom pain Psychosomatic creatures of the night Tears blaze a hot trail A line of salty stains Mar a sleeve Forcibly recalling The rising and the falling Of false hopes Somehow thinking to cope With the consequences of folly An enigma, the desire Creating a void One couldn...
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I find my mind wandering Constantly I drift among these walls memories were made moving on may terrify petrify or amaze even those most grounded look to the horizon beautifully painted and realize the dreams seeing that reality is never what it seems
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I enjoyed the overall piece very much, and don't have a lot to suggest in way of content. However, I do feel like the rhyme scheme could be a little stronger. The first stanza containing an ABCAB rhyme pattern is a little distracting, and I feel detracts from the rhythm of the words themselves. Especially since in the second stanza you all of a sudden turn to ABACB. This rhyme pattern makes more sense to me, but then the issue becomes the fact that "god" in the fourth line is a slant rhyme to...
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I think the idea of the limerick is quite clever. I am just not sure I feel the reasoning behind the title. Considering that you are being quite specific in naming President Obama to this piece, I was expecting a more specific idea of this applying directly to him. Instead, I feel like it could be a limerick about the precursors to the Revolutionary War. It could be a reference to several of the presidents we have had since. I would like to see you play up President Obama's presence in this p...
Bravo! This is my favorite time, when I get to read something so pregnant with imagery as this; evoking emotional reactions and physical sensations. I only had, for lack of a better word, issue with two areas. "and from pounding out a carnal cadence on your door" in the third stanza... I feel that the alliteration would be stronger, and would make the line break more effective if you brought cadence up so that it read: "and from pounding out a carnal cadence on your door" Additionally, the pa...
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