Cavol's profile

I like the blog and think the poem has great rhythm. I don't see how they relate. Not even a little. Almost seems like an oversight to include them together. To focus on the prose; it, for me, came across almost as commentary the wisdom real live experiences give you over what you'll get in college. For sure everyone lined up after you because you were the first one there and they assumed that was the correct order. Ironically, you, who caused the problem in the first place, were the only one...

The good: This has great, seemingly well researched and thoughtful information while still presenting your opinion (as you're very much telling people not only what's best for them,but what's best for them according to you)without discrediting the factual information you're presenting. The bad: You used the words "minerals" and "sunscreen" too frequently. Made it seem redundant. I'd take out all but the 1st mention of sunscreen then alternate synonyms of minerals wherever possible. You make y...

I think this will appeal to very many people in the sense that it talks about something as rudimentary as waking up from a more profound out look. I think it's good how you express the tedium of it all from your mention of hitting the snooze button multiple times to laundry and deadlines and all that stuff.

The good: -The whole thing was very visible - I could almost see it acted out in front of me (facial expressions and all) even in places where descriptions weren't given. I can totally see Dave's grandiose outbursts and Cheryl's sarcastic indifference to it. -"Harlot! I now see what your game is!" - very funny The bad: -(logistics) No way that sandwitch was still fresh after 4-5 days in the fridge; at least wilt the lettuce The bottom line: I kinda like it, but don't get it at the same time. ...