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AGE: 22
LOC: Austin, TX
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: May 13

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Short Story / Clay
Version 1
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Rebecca lived in a land where construction and reconstruction were as simple as molding clay. In fact, the streets, buildings and even people were made of clay. Individual appearance was superfluous as one day’s description differed from the next. Jealousy was but a whim easily curable with the slightest craftsmanship. One day Rebecca, while walking to the market, came across an elegant clay magazine dyed in the brightest inks. Etched on the front cover was a face and the name Justine, or so ...
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Poetry / LOST: innocence
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I liked this a lot. You capture and draw out multiple emotions from the reader which is very impressive. "you undress me with your eyes, it is clear oxygen no longer permeates the atmosphere surrounding my brain. I am abuzz, atremble, fingers quiver as I strive clumsily, I fear, to smash down stubborn wisps of hair that surely sprout from the most incongruous locations of my head and -- my, you smell good, er -- hmm?" This was my favorite paragraph as it captures comedy but keeps us grounded ...
Novel Treatments / Memories of a Sociopath
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I thought this was really good. The character was believable and easy to relate to. There was a number of funny moments throughout the piece, some which I couldn't help but laugh out loud. There are a few points where I felt that you could work on however: 1) I feel like the Plan B, or whichever one she decides to drop the sanitizer, is a bit of a cliche. I think you can find a way of having her introduce herself that is original and still lead to her dropping her tampon by accident (which is...
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