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AGE: 18
LOC: Spokane, WA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: April 24
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Short Story / Sand
Version 1
6 Reviews   1 Comment
Adam’s feet shuffled through the loose, fine sand, sinking into it slightly with each step, making the trek that much harder. The heat was unbearable, blistering. The sun was at his back, searing his skin. He had left his shirt behind an hour ago, thinking foolishly it was too hot to wear one. His eyes were fixed forward, on that shimmering in the distance. The way the ground seemed to ripple, breathe, the blue color, it had to be water, he was sure of it. Why wasn’t it getting any closer? He...
Poetry / Four Days
Version 3
1 Review   3 Comments
-Four Days- Something you asked me to do seems irrational to me, but you’re probably right. I still seem to chase the choice that makes no sense. An impossibility, a slim chance, I bet everything on it. Do I really want it? I always wanted stability, is it what I chose? On the first day you love me, on the second you don’t. Day three is hate, but day four is filled with sorrow. Then the first day comes back, the others follow suit. This cycle, is it a kind of twisted stability? Maybe I got wh...
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Poetry / Four Days
Version 2
4 Reviews   0 Comments
-Four Days- Something you asked me to do seems irrational to me, but you’re probably right. I still seem to chase the choice that makes no sense. An impossibility, a slim chance, I bet everything on it. Do I really want it? I always wanted stability, is it what I chose? On the first day you love me, and on the second you don’t. On the third you hate me, and on the fourth you’re sorry. Then the first day comes back, the others follow again. This cycle, is it a kind of twisted stability? Maybe ...
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Poetry / Four Days
Version 1
3 Reviews   3 Comments
-Four Days- Something you asked me to do seems irrational to me, but you’re probably right. I still seem to chase the choice that makes no sense though. An impossibility, a slim chance, I bet everything on it. Do I really want it? I always wanted stability, is it what I chose? On the first day you love me, and on the second you don’t. On the third you hate me, and on the fourth you’re sorry. Then the first day comes back, the others follow again. This cycle, is it a kind of twisted stability?...
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That was a powerful poem, and one that may speak the truth for many immigrants. Poetry wise it could use a little work, not to much though. It has a lot of meaning though, and you can tell it seems to touch a part of you that is important. Good job.
Poetry / The Child Denied
This poem has so much mystery, I first read it a few days ago, and now that its in my review quarry I'm glad I can review it. I interpret this to be a story of a young girl becoming pregnant before she is ready, then having the child, and finding she cannot deal with it, ending her own life possibly? But the last line throws me off, perhaps it means the child is now alone, without a mother? Or I could be miles away and it may not be about any of that. Either way it is a brilliant poem that ha...
Quotes / Perfection
This is a very real quote, one a lot of people could use. It could be a bit of a paradox for some though, who are only satisfied with themselves when others are satisfied with them first.
Poetry / Just A Dream
Dreams can take us to a lot of places, and prove to be great inspiration when writing. It sounds like you had a dream that made you think and reflect, and you did a good job of putting that to paper. Interesting how you tied it in to the new year. Nice poem.
Poetry / Reminisce
Very good poem, it touches the heart.
50.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
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