Well, the ending was unexpected to say the least. I appreciated the effort, but I wish you had expounded on the issues a bit more. Perhaps given a little more depth to the other siblings; bring a little bit more petulance to Madie, make Richard a bit more incoherent and slurred, and give Steven a little slimier (like a thinly veneered cars salesman) feel. The lawyer could have been more official, impersonal. I liked the basic premise; it just needs a tad more weight in the characterizations ...

I'm interested in what is happening. I want to read more, find out who the wronged person is, why s/he feels that. Find out what destroyed the old life and brought about the new one.

I loved that. It was so very real. I haven't read the piece that inspired this, but I can see and understand the feelings Tsali evoked. The need to protect what is his. Completely understandable and something almost everyone can relate to on a higher level.

I loved the story, but the death sequence became muddled with the use of "she." Having two female leads means a qualifier or something similar is necessary to establish who is doing what. Perhaps something like "the lighter hair faery" to you are able to visualize the scene properly. Overall, I liked this story because the fantasy elements also hit on major human themes: death, surviving, doing what is right and sometimes the failure of success. I definitely like your Dark Queen, the almost e...

Oh, I love this. The way she leaves bits of herself, to not understand the human parts of her and how she finally did what he wanted and missed out because it all too much. Poor fragile thing. I do wonder about the origins of her glass. Is that normal? Or is she special? Does she break off her breasts in anger? There's so much to explore in this short. I love it. I'd love a series of these, or a follow up. This story felt like a modern fairy tale. I'm sorry it took me so long to get back sinc...

I love the reaction of the nun to the friar's feverish questioning. And the Mother Superior's book is fabulous. The writing is very satirical with some kernels of truth. Who hasn't wondered what the nun wears underneath? Is it jeans, a t-shirt, and funny socks or a too long gown? The pacing is on point and I'd love to know nuns reaction after the friar is run out.

I do like the fact you have given images to words you say. Even if I do not agree wholeheartedly, there are definite resonance in the impassioned plea for Americans to wake up and realize what is important and to remember what made us. We are strong, but fallible. Falling through complacency. Or that was what I read from your speech. Perhaps writing it in paragraph form to make it easier to read and not break up the clear visual images.

This read more like a letter to a lover than a poem, but I liked it. We've all loved and lost someone in the past. We're never fully safe from the heartbreak of being left behind when the other person moves on. "Weather you still care for me or not, your her special someone now and I'll have to move on..." That should be "Whether you still care for me or not, you're her someone special now and I'll have to move on..."