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Mr. Bardo -- yes, it does flow. You writing is very straight-forward and a smooth read. You have a gift for story telling. Of course, I'm deeply interested in Leornard d.V. - the man fascinates me - and I also like the idea of an eternal witness to the evolution of human society. Someone who has bridged the different times and cultures (with all of their ways of "seeing" the world around them). So I really like your premise. Personally, I enjoyed the historical, cultural references. It gives ...

Yeah? ...and so, how does this end? C'mon guy, don't keep me waitin' -- I really like the beginning. (Who wouldn't want to talk with Leonardo?) And who is this immortal guy, anyway? Hmmmmmm? I do wonder about Ludovico's early days. Concerning the four "Fs" -- did he have any significant personal relationships? With any maternal or paternal being? Best friends over the ages? Did he fornicate? Any discrimination because he was different? Along with Leonardo's artistic and engineering genius, wi...

OK,OK -- am I a naughty boy if I confess I really liked it? You really have a gift for storytelling. I could easily see this as part of a book. If it gets published, let me know. You main characters were quite fully "fleshed" out. (And I wanted to know more about them.) I really liked the energy you compress in a sentence or phrase. It makes the writing exciting. What follows are a few minor observations. These in no way diminish my admiration for your writing. (In fact you don't even have to...

This worked not only as a strong image -- but for me the ending was the real kicker. Where do the boundaries of the tigress end and the jungle begin? They don't. There is this unification of being and environment. Both strong and illuminated in the darkness with a light that lends itself to mystery. OK, so I liked it. Do you ever write tanka? (I'm new; still finding my way around this site.) Also, do you have an overview of what your haikus should contain or allude to? Also, did you know ther...