Arion's profile

the dialogue that your characters shared were good. I enjoyed reading what they had to say to each other. The personalities are good...I could tell that each of the characters has some depth to them, as if they have their own stories and lives. The flow of it went well, however, I felt that seeing the two mysterious figures plot at the end was a bit cliche...perhaps you can try and make that part unique. Over all I enjoyed it and look foreward to reading up on these characters.