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AGE: 48
LOC: Las Vegas, NV
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: December 31

Still finding my way around the whole “credit” thing….I have been a professional writer on and off for 20 years.  My poetry has been published in university and local literary press.  As a journalist, I published for 6 years.  I have been focused writing pagan philosophy for the past two years, but prior to that I wrote a Dark Fiction novel.  I am also working on a series of Dark Fiction short stories and still write poetry.

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Version 1
2 Reviews   4 Comments
I remember How we laughed… You were always More clever than me. I never could match You wonderful sense of absurdity. And I believe I fell For every ploy You ever set. For someone who wasn’t number one… You could always get the best of me. And you know, I think you did.
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Version 1
8 Reviews   7 Comments
I knew it well, My box of a hundred locks. One lock Was put there by Mom. Another by Dad. My sister said I shouldn’t and put another one there. My brother said I couldn’t, and added two more. Then a teacher, a neighbor, a friend or two added their locks to my box. When Pretty added hers, Athletic added his. Intelligence wouldn’t make up its mind Putting on and taking off locks every other day. Convention had a field day and lined her locks in nice, neat rows. Religion put on just a few, but t...
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Poetry / Confessor
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1 Review   0 Comments
My excesses bothered you, or so you said. And yet they held you fast to me. You swore. I was your very best and secret friend. I worshipped you a decade’s length or more. To guard the hidden treasure that we forged, we oathed a silent, secret loyalty. To be, as long as treasure lasts, to each the ever best that we knew how to be. In time, you pitched me to your angry God. My love - to bait a moot salvation test You hocked our friendship for the merest loan of one week’s washing in your Sunday...
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Poetry / Stray
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5 Reviews   1 Comment
Along the shore the footprints mark your passing. And with the tide your place among us was seemingly lost. But the sand knows you passed. And the sea knows you passed. And, so do I.
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Poetry / By Choice
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If the price of inner freedom is memory Then I shall not be free. I cannot ask of myself to walk out this door, knowing I will never see you again and forbid your memory. You see, if in the renewed pleasure your memory evokes - there also comes the pain of your absence - then I will embrace that pain. For you are worthy of both.
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Poetry / Come Down
You rhymed it wrong but the story carries you past that. Terrifying, sad and beautiful. Ardriana
Wonderful. Full of rage and sorrow and venom and remorse. Vivid imagery, pointed and blunt. I don't get a feeling of helplessness, even if the speaker hasn't yet found the way to rescue herself. The fight in the words tell me that she will. Well done. Ardriana
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Questions to other writers
1. Do you consider the use of words such as he, she, it, and, they, as, the, to, etc to count towards repetition? I do. However, if a paragraph is written well they go unnoticed. Interchanging a name in place of a pronoun eases this. Refining the actions of a character to be more sweeping or generalized will help, too. Do I need to say that "He opened the bathroom cabinet, grabbed his toothpaste and his toothbrush, applied a generous squirt of paste on his brush and plunged it into his mouth....
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Poetry / The Big Bang
A sonnet. In an hour. On that little subject The Big Bang? Stretch much? Tackling a sonnet is a very brave thing because like an American Idol singing a iconic song, it is impossible to not make comparisons and rarely do the critics say the singing bested the icon. This was a good attempt, though. The rhythm and rhymes, however, are a little "pitchy." It was a good exercise. I loved the imagery that the angels watched in wonder. Also loved: "...the droplet of earth, swam the galaxy." "...so...
Poetry / Knife
I have a weakness for dark fiction and dark humor, so I love this poem. Especially since the stabbing didn't actually happen. Thus, it is the cathartic imagination of a civilized person who would have liked this to happen,(to him - assuming it's a him by the "favorite shirt" and the "Camels"). Much of my short stories and dark poetry are justice themed and you convey a bit of injustice by your tone. I love the way you casually mention that you stabbed him, between throwing the wine and the sp...
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Poetry / I Want
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