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AGE:
26
LOC: Chicago, IL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 14
LOC: Chicago, IL
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 14
April Galarza has been writing since the age of five. Although her first short story Hiccups! did not receive much acclaim, the crayon written manuscript was the beginning of a lifetime devoted to the written word. April grew up in Colchester, CT and now resides in Chicago, IL. Against the advice of her “mentor in spirit” and major influence Sandra Cisneros, she married a Mexican and blames him and his magnificent family for much of her creative inspiration. She graduated from Columbia College Chicago. She spent time as an editor and writer for Spirit: a Magazine Designed for the Diverse Woman and a reporter for the The Near West Gazette. She is currently working for Pearson Education. Whenever she is not editing she is hard at work on …
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“This is the tale of a young man” Your tenses are inconsistent. You need to choose whether to tell the story in present or in past tense. Your introduction has nothing to do with the story. “George du pont” needs to be capitalized “George Du Pont” Make sure you do a spelling and grammar check before you submit. There are several misspellings and words that should be capitalized “or obe” what does this mean? I can’t decide whether the frequency of awkward sentence construction is supposed to r...
Interesting start: You give us sense of foreboding without giving away anything. I’m immediately drawn in by my curiosity. What happened to the mother to make her afraid for her daughter? “ I just hadn’t considered the fact that I might fall dead from exhaustion” Is this sarcasm or a real fear? How long is this walk? “The necklace I had gotten for graduation, the one that said my name “Charlie” on it, seemed to be permanently stuck to my chest with perspiration. “ Great detail! Is it her name...
"The sleeves hung inches past my hands;" "I thought I could smell your scent," "and drifted into sleep knowing I was not alone." Beautiful. I took a poetry class in high school with John L. Stanizi who was once lauded with the title of New England Poet Laurette and he taught us that that good poem needed to be like a photograph but incorporating all the sensory details in addition to evoking an emotional response from the reader. This poem does all of these things. Well done. I love how you c...
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