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AGE:
21
LOC: Marrero, LA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 14
LOC: Marrero, LA
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: November 14
I’m a bored twentysomething living in New Orleans. I’d like to change the world, ala Kurt Cobain, but I sleep too much to do it. I mainly like Dada and surrealist stuff, as well as postmodern literature. I dunno why but art fascinates me. Anyway contact me if you wanna talk or whatever. I’m open….
I also maintain a blog at http://thoughtsaboutlife.today.com/
Come check it out if you’ve got that sort of free time.
And if you like my writing, come see me as the New Orleans Celebrity Headline Examiner: http://www.examiner.com/x-26614-New-Orleans-Celebrity-Headlines-Examiner
Copy and paste away, o’ yee faithful.
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Death is a disease growing inside all of us. We aid it by every day, smoking, fucking, testing the chances of our limitations, seeking thrills but finding only the cold, bony hands of the Grim Reaper to guide us into Hell. It's a cancer that festers inside our very souls, it gnaws at our insides, and we feed it. I see it every day, walking the streets. I see it in the mutilated remains of a dog that's been run over in the street, I see it in every news report of a downed airplane, I see it s...
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A darkness unfolds. I see only you standing there, amidst a mist of clouds and fogs. Worms dig in the Earth and I can hear them. Ground, cement, rough pebbles and only a grey concrete to comfort me. The moon is half-crescent and the crickets chirp, a silent chorus for a meeting with just the two of us. Eerie breezes, blowing from all directions, glimmering twilight, the horizon expanding just beyond where I can see, the endless expansion of the nocturnal sky, whose stars never stop shin...
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(It is a bright and early Sunday morning. A church, sparsely but ornately decorated. The floor is a glossy shade of gold, looking freshly waxed. Towards the back, a stained glass window. A few rows of benches line the church. A medium-sized altar to the side. Two men, Cane and Abel, sit in their seats facing the front. They continually stare off into space, their hands on their laps, dressed in brown rags and beat-up hats. Finally, Cane speaks.) Cane: What day is it? Abel: Sunday. Cane: Wasn&...
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Myself, Tom, Stan, and Theodore stood at the edge of the universe, watching the swirling galaxies, the stars, the suns, all of space. Stan sat crouched on an asteroid, his hands to his chin. "Earth, what do you think that is?" he asked. We all looked around for a minute and it became quite obvious. "Well, Stan, everyone knows it's a planet," I guffawed. "No, no, no," he shook his head, "I know that. But what genre would you classify it under?" "Genre?" Theodore questioned. "Yeah, yeah, genre...
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The quote opening up this piece is good; it sets the mood. I like how you describe an overview of the government and include yourself in here, asking questions of the reader along the way. This helps draw the audience in. "a sickeningly opulent prism" I like this phrase for some reason. Hmm. Interesting ending. I like how the tension builds via the imagery and all. However, I felt this ended way too soon. I'm curious as to what exactly is going on here? This is a dream, I'm guessing. I'd like...
A funny and breezy piece. You get right to the point and launch the reader into it. I like how you describe the people actually trying it out and how you google it at the end. The details are good too. I liked the ps at the end, it added a nice epilogue to this entry.
"Is ¾ of our hard-earned money in some cryptic, wealthy only type of escrow?" Awkward opening sentence. I like the word choice. Eloquent but down-to-earth. "Though I haven’t reached the cusp of my uttering in this post," A bit of unclear phrashing there. You've got a very strong argument and passionate prose here. You come across as righteously indignant buy you explain your opinions. That way, it comes across as calm and not just rageful ranting. However, what you have in rhetoric, you lack ...
Clever idea. However, Mike goes along too willingly with this idea at the beginning. Akward phrashing. Either use quotations or switch it around somehow. "Mike clicked his tongue. “Half-Elven ranger, thank you.” Great line. However, would he really click his tongue? Cute piece. As an avid gamer and someone who once participated in these role-playing games, I appreciated this. It has a very tongue-in-cheek, breezy tone, which fits with the characters and situation you described. The dialogue i...
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