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AGE:
17
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 06
LOC: United States
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: September 06
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open the slow-healing wounds, and push your fingers into the gruesome cuts. admire the masterpiece you have carved into my flesh. oh the beautiful contrast of red and white! my body is your canvas; my blood your sacred paint, and if you should tire of this, you use your hands to carefully peel my tender flesh and sculpt your vision of perfection. as i bury my tear-stained face into the wet sheets...soaked in our sinful liquid. you say this is a labour of love, i am a welcomed sacrifice. all t...
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i like the repeated usage of "acid" since it allows the stanzas to flow very well. in my opinion, the opening lines are a good contrast to the choppy, fast-paced wording throughout each stanza. it allows me as a reader to stay focused on a concrete image and i can build up from there. if i may ask, does the acid (be it as a noun or adjective) serve as some motif? i also find the references to blood signifiny the unbreakable bond between mother and child. "bad blood" reminds me that the mother...
simple lyrics to describe painful heartache. i can see this song being expanded. i like how direct it is; if you could keep that going throughout the piece while adding to it, it'd turn out wonderfully.
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