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AGE: 18
LOC: Orinda, CA
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: October 25

just your average neurotic impulsive strung-out teenager who can’t put together a list of adjectives to save her life—but she’ll damn well try to.

i’d love to talk to you,
friendly neighborhood dope dealer,
cookie baker, heartbreaker,
etcetera. send a message.

get stupid / dumb / hyphy / reading.

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Poetry / Carnivores
Version 1
6 Reviews   8 Comments
I didn't know free was a verb until Guantanamo invaded the family table talk, a hook pierced through my father's lower lip, dragging him struggling to the surface while downstairs the muted newscaster mouthed terror behind that great wide fishbowl justice. We sometimes play by the rules, throw the small ones back, limp-limbed, to glass-eyed anonymity, confining the rest to discuss over dinner: American fear and American freedom to slaughter and serve anything processed enough to no longer l...
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Version 1
4 Reviews   12 Comments
here are contorted angles of hands that once hammered silver now soldered together in prayer her knotted grey hair a birds' nest of ash and distraction her son’s fingers tangled in unwashed wool chest reluctant to drink the soot and smog of Bangkok haze mother and child, stones eroded by sidewalk traffic worn smooth by the harsh transparency of averted eyes here is the collapsible universe of her empty pockets throat coated with honey to soothe the wounds of the city's reply—silence here are ...
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Poetry / Flying Lessons
Version 2
8 Reviews   3 Comments
She stands before the mirror again, her threaded seashell spine twisted in dispassionate disgust as she travels the familiar valleys, the topography of self-hatred, her arms outstretched like a patient crucified on a hospital bed. She wants to escape the ribcage that encircles her heart like a chastity belt to hunger-- she wants to flutter like the feathers she finds on the beach and only the mirror can teach her how to fly. Want nothing, it says, until the wind rushes through the gaps betwe...
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Poetry / Inspiration
Version 1
8 Reviews   6 Comments
Over her breast, her hands clasp fragments of darkness, rips in spacesuits, involuntary sighs through purple lips. It is the white noise of waves over sand, the rustle of bed-sheets in dim condominiums in the twilight. The feet are the last to vanish, curled toes buried in the womb's shores. Something stirs within her: The first breath like florescent flickering. She awakens, suddenly electrified, shuddering, grasping seashells like pacifiers, numb fingertips searching out the sun in frozen o...
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Poetry / The Dead Sixties
Version 1
6 Reviews   4 Comments
The summer of love has frozen over, and I think it's about time my generation faced the fact that the 60's are dead! Now, I can appreciate the nostalgia of our parents and their parents rehashing their hashing, et cetera, and I hate to be the bearer of blatant truths, but our generation has no excuse for trying to relive the past for sons of sons desperately reaching through the looking glass; to remake the present into "It's a Small World After All" ghost-town merry-go-rounds and anarcho-pun...
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i think this is an interesting piece that needs some polishing. i think you already know the strong points of this poem-- images like "trembling nerves conducting" and "pathos misconstrues the image of love"-- so i'll do mostly critique. stanza 1: love the first line. however you have some problems with verb tense; the verb "became" is in past tense, and then the next line's verb "i can hear" is in present tense, and then "were" goes back to past. this problem is pervasive throughout the poem...
Poetry / Setting Sail
i think you have a good starting metaphor and idea here, but right now the images in your poem are not unique enough for me. i understand you are using stiff, formal language intentionally, but i think you could develop the specific imagery better. the poem feels too expected. for example, the word "unfurl" used in the context of a sail is commonplace; things generally being "entwined" (intertwined?) is overused; the phrase "far off shores" is cliche. i liked the phrase 'landbound legs' and '...
100.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
Poetry / Fainting
wow, i really enjoyed this. i don't think that anyone could suspect this is "just about fainting," although i see multiple other meanings. what this really reminded me of-- and perhaps this wasn't your intention-- was someone who is agoraphobic and is afraid to leave the house and participate in society. the narrator "seeks acceptance" but feels "disposable", "refuses to participate," feels even physically "limited." the whitening complexion particularly suits both fainting and my own interpr...
66.6667% Review Quality (3 Votes)
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Discipline
there was a lot of clever word choice in this piece-- "discotheque-brain" and "groovy-oozy" were both interesting and refreshing to read-- but the grammar errors made it a struggle. i understand the run-on sentence, stream-of-consciousness style was intentional, but it's really a pain to read without any punctuation to break it up (and with some of the current punctuation being incorrect). also, i wish there was a bit more at the beginning to propel the person the speaker is addressing than "...