I never read any of the other chapters or versions of this story so I don't know much about what's going on, but it was really cute! I like Charlie (I thinks that's his name) he was really cool. Was he the redneck fairy? lol Anyways, it was really interesting and I thought it was pretty funny about how that Myer guy was using this machine to suck up fairies and prairy dogs. I don't know why I thought that was funny, but it just made me think of a vacuum. Anyways, great job! It would be a good...

Wow that persons a jerk! Anyways, I like the way this poem related to some of the cruel things that people do to other people in life. I feel really bad for that one guy who needed spare change! X*(

Oh that's cute. I feel bad for the person though because (he or she) will never get to be with that person! :*( Anyways, there wasn't very many typing errors, so I would say that it was pretty good.

I really really like the medifores in here. Great job! "Reticently, you acted like a chicken scratching in a coup. I humbly sat pigeon holed like a bird honing in the roost." In my opinion that line was the best.

Aw what a cute kid. I feel bad for him. What exactly is wrong with him? Anyways, I liked the way you wrote this story and the "If only you knew"s.

Wow this was really great! I like the ending lines the best: "Tebogo is dead, but they can sing. They can still sing." Something about it just seemed really inspiring.

WHOAH! AWESOMMMMEEE!!!! That would make a wonderful song. ^^ Great lyrics and a very nice story line behind it. I wish I knew the beat and such so I could hear what the song would sound like...oh well. Good job though!

I can't even tell you how much of a good poem this is! I totally understood it all. The metiphores and word chices were great. Two thumbs up for you!

Wholy crap. That scared the living daylights out of me. That was a very good story and I'm not used to scary stories so I was all like "Eeeeeeeek!" But yeah...it had lot's of suspence so no complaints from me. There was some grammar mistakes but otherwise it was great. Great job! oh! And I also liked your writing method. It was very neat.

lol I like this. It's kind of funny the simplicity of it. I hope they choose this one because it's just so unexpected.