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AGE:
26
LOC: Columbus, OH
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 14
LOC: Columbus, OH
GEN: Male
LAST LOGIN: August 14
You might want to go ahead and block me, I have a weird habit of encouraging people to do better and to prove me wrong. Many find it rude to act this way in a writers’ workshop.
I never went to high school or college.
Just punch the air.
-Doctor Who
If all things are possible, then it must be possible for all things to be impossible. If all things are impossible then it must be impossible for anything to be possible.
All things cannot be possible.
-Schuyler Twombly
If you’re ever satisfied with anything, you’ve got problems.
-Bill Johnson
I’m a fiction writer:
The Summer of ‘76
I coauthored a short story with Lincoln Crisler which is…
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Version 1
9 Reviews
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Lots of practice expressing imaginary images.
Version 2
6 Reviews
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With practice they flow into observers.
Version 1
7 Reviews
4 Comments
Pens, paper, success, failure. Still going.
Version 2
6 Reviews
1 Comment
"So, you’re not going?" I stood up from the tattered bare mattress where she lay, and walked across the mess to the idiot-box. Starla stretched and rapped the headboard. "Does my life require it of me to go?" “It doesn’t really matter how life happens.” I turned off the teevy and stepped to the window to look at the busy road, stories down. “It doesn’t matter whether you stand or sit, you’re part of it. You’re connected to life but away from it all. Sure, you’re life.” I pointed out the windo...
Version 2
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The main objective of corruption that gets you looking the other way on social, political and environmental issues is funding and net profits. Cover-ups maintain stockholder support and help companies and governments (monetary units, in particular)jump up on the NYSE tote board. And what do ya do with money? If you’re a business, you hire employees. The whole objective of the business is to give people something to do with their lifetimes (jobs) while maintaining the ability to give people so...
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That's intake. It gives no sense of creativity, no sense of release. It has as much expression of creativity as: Pink Floyd and weed in my basement. You've simply told that what Bukowski says to you is: "Drink bourbon" You've shown that you can express yourself in so short a span; now explain yourself in as few words. Next time, though, do it without an amper's and.
Your story is unbelievable because after a stranger walked to me and said, without room for interruption, those first three sentences, I would just get up and walk away. Don't tell the story, show the story. Let your reader experience the story, as is promised in the first sentence. To a google search for: "Show, don't just tell" and "Show don't tell". Outmoded. Outmoted is not a word. Many have done what at my hands? Who? Who is Narrator, what gender? Who is Narrator talking to? Who exactly ...
The story is interesting and I followed it through to the end but it's anti-climactic and light on situational interest. For a trip west in the eighteen-sixties, I recommend Roughing It a travelogue by Mark Twain. Include in your story: Who, what, when, where, why, how. You have only: Who, what, and how, and the barest hints of where and why. By "where", I don't mean a state or city or place-name, I mean: in a desert field of cactus and sagebrush, surrounded by canyons. Describe Possum Holler...
I found this very confusing; it seemed to be hyperbole. Pale moon skin illuminates in the faint light on the silver haired woman. [What does pale moon skin illuminate? That doesn't make sense, grammatically. If the pale moon skin is the source of illumination, what faint light does it then illuminate within? Faint light from where, is it contained only on the silver haired woman? Does this story have any location or does it take place on a black background?] Her eyes are diffused with somber ...
A memoir is a piece of autobiographical writing, usually shorter in nature than a comprehensive autobiography. This is not a memoir, not a story of, from, or about your life; this is a catch-phrase of fact, presented silly. For humor/satire, I've heard it before and I kind of chuckled, then; this time I nodded. Your use of punctuation is appalling. You use two marks, one absolutely misplaced and the other pointless. A semicolon is placed before an introductory word in the middle of a sentence...
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