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LAST LOGIN: May 21
LAST LOGIN: May 21
I’m a 25 year old novelist working at my craft the only way I know how; by doing it. I’m a high school drop-out and live on the verge of homelessness. Lucky the place I’m in now has internet. I discovered this site through Myspace… the only useful thing that site has ever done for me. If you care to contact me personally for whatever reason my email is adam_irizarry@hotmail.com. I’ll certainly respond to any questions or comments you might have that go beyond what we talk about here on Urbis. Of course, this open door policy is doubly true for any agents or editors who my happen across my work. I learned to write the hard way, by reading and writing. Hanging out at the library when I should’ve been chasing pussy. Sacrificing …
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i'm not sure how i feel about this... your narration is kind of odd. like "critically injured" sounded... clinical? "instantly resembled"? that's such a wishy washy narrative tone. and can you say "user friendly" in the 70's? you narration needs a lot of work, nevermind "user friendly". it sounds really amateurish. i'd advise you to do much more reading in the area you want to write, and of course, more writing.
interesting. kind of unsettling, but very cool. i'd strike the beginning though, the story really doesn't begin until the 4th paragraph. and there's no ending... but an entertaining snippet, and a fair promise of things to come, i hope. if you flesh this out you could have something, but i'm sure you're not really interested. after all, it really is just a snippet. can't wait to see some real shit from you, as i've said in every review i've given you. beginning middle end and character and wi...
this is fucking HILARIOUS. I mean, i don't know how good of a STORY it is, as far as beginning middle end, etc. but my god this shit.. i was literally laughing out loud the entire time. you're fucking funny, i';m gonna go check and see if you got any real stories on here. if not-- PUT SOME ON!!
best one yet. "which escapes me at the present" and "even if he did make me ride the small cow?" are hysterical lines. i totally dig what you're doing with your stories and i love it. right in the middle, leading up to you screaming "mr president!" was a little off, it just sounded amateurish all the sudden. still i'm gonna give you another 9, because at least someone around here is fucking trying.
clever, but pointless. alot of pretty words saying exactly zilch. my first bad review for you. and things were going so well... sniff sniff... :)
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