This has promise though through a combination of punctuation and I think misuse of words it is not very clear. For example I am not sure what you mean by "feel only regress" This doesn't make sense to me. I am not sure you can feel regress. Did you mean regrets?

This is an interesting piece. It seems to be more a short story or piece of flash fiction than poetry. In fact it is not till it gets to the last 2 stanzas that I get a feeling of poetry coming from it.

This is great. It took me a couple of readings to get into it but after that I got a lot from it. Was it really written to this standard in 45 minutes? it has a feeling of being worked on and polished. I think you should consider collecting this and other of your poems together and either sending out to an agent or self publishing.

There is an interesting idea behind this poem. An idea that I think could bear further exploration. By embodying three different characters into one you have the opportunity to look at what was the motive, why if they knew who they were shaving didn't they act? A promising start but I think it needs to expand

This is a good story. You invoke the experience of Raven very well. The fear she feels as she enters the woods and her experience after the fall. Good luck with the competiton.

I fall into the loved it camp on this. In fact I think it a quite beautiful piece of writing, finely balanced enough to leave some ambiguity ( I haven't read the previous versions) but still clear and a joy to read. I look forward to reading more of your writing.

This is a very interesting and enjoyable piece. It seemed to me that you have something here that could be developed further. The connection betweeen the Omega Wolf and the human is interesting and I would like to know more about it.How did it come about and why. Also the past encounters between Andresen and Thalamus would be intersting to hear about. Having said all that I think you need to do quite a bit of editing on this, both to correct typos and to clarify the text. You use too many ad...

There are a lot of interesting and beautiful images here. Though I am not sure how they tie up. If you are aiming for a surreal poem that is good but otherwise it reads like a lot of disconnected lines grouped together randomly.

This is very good, a bit bleak but still good. You have used imagery very well. I am glad you noted that vouchers should be vultures, although that could have been quite an interesting surreal image!

This is interesting. However I am not sure what jaded to the tree means.