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AGE:
28
LOC: Canada
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: February 04
LOC: Canada
GEN: Female
LAST LOGIN: February 04
I quit. Please delete this account.
I spend hours reviewing other people’s stuff. GOOD reviews, and yet, for some reason they are refunded as ‘not constructive enough’ or ‘not detailed enough’ despite giving LOTS of details and good reviews. I review ten items and nine get rejected. I am currently at -119 credits because of this.
I am told I can contest the refunds, however, I have done this and I have gotten NO REPLIES ever. So obviously the staff who handle refunds dont actually read the refund messages sent, and they aren’t doing their job.
Sorry, I’m tired of spending hours reviewing other people’s stuff and still not being able to afford to read my OWN reviews. I’m going back to writing.com.
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Very nice. Short, but all haikus are. I can find nothing wrong with it except... the double E line looks a little funny... that and Ephemeral is a tough word (I had to look it up). Has much hope and promise though.
Very interesting. I am thinking pregnant bellied needs a - between it, but I'm not too sure. Maybe look into it to see if it should? Also, I am skeptical that TWO women would leave him due to a lazy eye. Obviously those women did not actually love him... wanted him for his money perhaps? That makes sense if I think of it that way. Its still farfetched though as if they wanted the money badly enough to marry some one they didnt know, they'd not care about a lazy eye. The end was... VERY much a...
I do not read much flash fiction, tbh. Its not in my taste. But this is well written and I found little wrong with it. The ending chilled me a little bit... if that is what you are going for then it worked VERY well. I felt very bad for Jacob. Felt sorry for him. The story moved me. Critique wise, I think the fifth paragraph could use a description of HOW the members were moving towards him - IE, omniously, carefully, etc? Also, the number of F-bombs seens really high (But it may be just me)....
100.0% Review Quality (2 Votes)
Teeny missing punctuation: fifth paragraph, last line: should have a period on the end! The amount of cursing, while understandable and 'in character' I think would be much better if some was merely mentioned in narration 'The man cursed fluently and frequently, before exclaiming "Where's my money?!" However, considering the theme so far I dont see it as a BIG problem. I reccomend giving us more information at the beginning of who the Crimson Knights are. Actual knights/warriors? A gang? A pe...
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